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USD's Writing
« on: November 22, 2009, 11:24:32 AM »
I suppose writing is a form of artwork, so I will start up a thread about a book I've been writing.  So far the story is about a small boy who was rescued after his parents were murdered by a pirate.  He goes to the Jedi Temple to become a Jedi, and then it goes into a bigger plot that I will get into detail with later.  I am currently in the process of transferring it from my older computer to the laptop, but due to the fact that the USB port is broken, I have to do it the old fashioned way and transfer it manually.
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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #1 on: November 22, 2009, 06:47:24 PM »
I finished transferring it completely.  I will get more into detail with the plot once I get into it.
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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #2 on: November 24, 2009, 01:02:45 AM »
USD, I can't believe you are transferring a novel by handto you pc....I'd be very interested to read your novel when it' done!

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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #3 on: November 29, 2009, 10:09:54 AM »
Thanks very much, Jules.  So far here's the plot:

The small boy, Padawan Erinos, was rescued by Jedi Master Tyvon Roaf.  After seeing his parents death, it is debated immensely whether he should become a Jedi or be cast out.  After days of argument, the council agrees to elect the boy and he is trained.  Then I go a bit into the future as he was only five then, and he begins to exhibit more grown up properties then from when he was young, and his training is just about over.  On a Star Destroyer in the Outer Rim, the ship is attacked and he is assigned to an evacuation team.  Traveling around the ship's corridors, the only being he can find is another Padawan, Mensaura Gowards, who he quickly befriends and helps evacuate the ship.  Along the way to the evacuation ship, they run into droids and quickly defeat them with team work.  Then I begin to write about battles on both the ground and the air, and how he is injured.  Then during one battle, Mensaura is believed dead and the boy murders the killer in cold blood.  Instead of facing trial, he banishes himself to Mandalore.

Of course this is all in a nutshell and there is still more to be written.
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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #4 on: November 29, 2009, 10:10:38 AM »
I think I will post the prologue and first chapter on here soon, if there is a demand.
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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #5 on: November 29, 2009, 10:19:51 AM »
Here's the prologue.  Suggestions are welcomed immensely!

P R O L O G U E






   On the desolate planet of Stoga, a place of impossible futres, a community sets in peace.  This small and arid outpost made a living off of moisture farming.  Nobody ever became rich, but never poor.
   The people of the town were peaceful.  Uncorrupted.  They minded their business and everyone got along fine.
   Then one day, about five years before the outbreak of the Clone Wars, a vandalist, a pirate if you would, came into town.  The hoodlum searched for whatever things he could find from family possesions to simple necessities.  Finding an unguarded little hut on the outskirts of town, he went inside...
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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #6 on: November 29, 2009, 05:05:57 PM »
Like it....like it...a.....lo

Nince little morcel my friend, it's got me hooked!

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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #7 on: November 29, 2009, 05:27:29 PM »
I like the writing style, Dan. Sounds good.

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Re: USD's Writing
« Reply #8 on: November 30, 2009, 07:54:12 AM »
Thank you, guys.  I'm in the process of revising the first chapter, so I can get that up soon.
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