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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #105 on: May 11, 2011, 08:08:26 AM »
so... where is yoda? ... i CAN'T believe you killed off smashbolt... she was like my soulmate

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #106 on: May 11, 2011, 01:07:11 PM »
Pat, I really don't think I could ever dare add graphics to your writing here, as it would take something away from the images you paint with your words.

Number one, I could actually feel the tension as Lea and her protégée walked into battle
Number two, I felt surprise and a smile came over my face when the sniper shot hit its mark...that was just sweet the way you built things up and then with a fizz erased Smashbolt out of the equation. I've not been in battle, but I guess that must be what happens sometimes, your buddy suddenly wiped out by a shot, and you have to just move forward.

To be able to stir the emotions is such an amazing gift, and it is something you achieve with every new piece of creative writing you post. Simply awesome!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #107 on: May 11, 2011, 02:41:34 PM »
Wow, what great action. Daggone I hope Leia and Jade get into a light saber battle next time, but I guess Jade is pulling back.

I can't wait to see what Luke and Obi get into.

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #108 on: May 11, 2011, 03:25:17 PM »
WOAH!  why the hell arent you published!
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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #109 on: May 11, 2011, 04:54:18 PM »
Guys, your praise is highly appreciated!  I can't wait to get the next chapter finished, I think you guys are really going to like how this goes!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #110 on: May 13, 2011, 10:31:00 AM »
I have to echo what Julian is saying, your writing evokes emotion and I can see all of this happening in my head like I am watching a movie. I love your posts here and all of your stories for that matter. Great job Pat!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #111 on: May 13, 2011, 10:59:47 AM »
another amazing chapter pat!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #112 on: May 14, 2011, 08:24:02 PM »
     The cacophany of mayhem transcending the battlefield rang out like a well orchestrated symphony in Darth Leia's ears.  She stood atop a low hilltop, observing the chaos as an artist would observe the myriad of colors upon her canvas.  Rebels and Stormtroopers, Commandos and Feartroopers, battled harshly with blasters, vibroblades, and even fists.  The piles of bloodied, mangled, scorched bodies continued to pile up on both sides.  Leia could care less about the body count, the troopers on either side were insignificant.  All that mattered to her were the Jedi.  She now counted three at the fringes of the battlefield.  The older one she recognized as her father's most hated nemesis, a Jedi of the old Order, before the fall of the Republic.  The only Jedi to escape the Purge and Vader's vengeane, this Jedi was responsible for more Imperial deaths and corruption of the Empire's reign than Jedi General Obi-Wan Kenobi.  The red haired Jedi, newly entering the fray, could be none other than Jedi Master Mara Jade, a pest who desperately needed exterminating.  Leia guessed by her only recently showing up to the battle that perhaps she had something to do with the assassination of her former Right Hand, Smashbolt.  She would be sure to be the one to take Jade's head before the day came to a close.  The third Jedi, she did not recognize, though something familiar rang out from him through the Force.  Peculiar, it resonated very strongly within her.  The younger Jedi stood well behind the field of battle, lightsaber drawn but not ignited.  Clearly, Kenobi was keeping him in reserve, but for what?   A blaster shot seared towards her, soaring easily past her jet black hair as Leia had plenty of time and reflex enough to dodge the sloppy shot.  Several times, one Rebel or another had taken shots at her, each time dodged easily or batted away with her lightsaber.  Darth Leia smiled a cruel, wicked smile as she breathed in the stench of combat and death, her black lips peeling apart in an evil sneer.  She grew tired of merely watching the fight; she longed to enter into it and taste the blood of the pitiful Rebel scum as it sprayed from their throats newly opened by her violet blade.
     Leia strode seductively towards the battlefield, her curvy hips swaying to and fro, her saunter as alluring as it was fearsome.  Both hands clutched the hilt of her dual lightsabers, held out from her side.  Her back arched slightly backwards, pushing her amble breasts outward, an act that yielded the desired results: the battlefield now focused their attention on her, whether it be direct or indirect.  As she neared the closest assembly of warring combatants, she ignited her twin blades and cut them all down, Rebel and Imperial alike.  She did not care to discern enemy from ally, all she cared about was the slaughter.  All that mattered was cutting her path towards the Jedi.

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     The change in the winds was apparent through the Force.  The Sith had entered the battle, just as Obi-Wan figured that she would.  Her bloodlust was legendary, and she was incapable of holding off from killing.  Kenobi had tried to hold back from the battle as much as he could, providing only limited advantage for the Rebels scattered throughout the battlefield using Force Synergy.  "Master Jade, Skywalker, stay put.  Do not enter the field of battle," said to the other Jedi through the Force.  "I will face the girl on my own.  Jade, should I fall, you are to evacuate the Rebels and secure Skywalker.  His training is complete, but he has much to learn yet and cannot be sacrificed."  Master Kenobi shrugged off his tattered brown robes and headed off to face the Dark Lady of the Sith, his veridian blade accenting the verdant greens of the grasses.  Imperials flocked to him in hopes of being the lucky one to take down the vaunted Jedi who had escaped the Purge.  Obi-Wan cut them down easily as the flung themselves at him clumsily.  Just like the so called Vader's Fist, the 501st Legion that he had made short work of at the Jedi Temple on Coruscant all those many years ago, these Feartroopers of the 818th were clumsy and irrational.  Obi-Wan's green blade swung in a series of rapid arcs, like flowing flit bugs in the night on Naboo.  Just as a conductor waves his wand to orchestrate a beautiful symphony, Obi-Wan waved his lightsaber, conducting an ensemble of his own.  His flourishes and parrys, his thrusts and waves were flawless and never missed their mark.  He strode through them as easily as Darth Leia was through her adversaries on her end.  As Kenobi neared the center of the battlefield, a cold wave of dread washed over all present.  Master Kenobi stopped and looked into the distance. Standing there, atop the same hill Leia once occupied, stood a black clad, armored force of Evil.  His billowing black cape flowed like a wraith from his shoulders, the sun glistened off his onyx domed helmet.  Pure, unadulterated hatred and rage emanated from the dark figure standing there, blood red lightsaber blade glowing and pulsing at his side.

Darth Vader had arrived.  All who stood in his way would die this day.

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #113 on: May 15, 2011, 05:03:47 AM »
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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #114 on: May 15, 2011, 05:38:14 AM »
get this to a publishers..............NOW!
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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #115 on: May 15, 2011, 07:45:34 AM »
Freaking awesome Pat.

I agree, send it to someone and let them pay you!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #116 on: May 15, 2011, 10:43:04 AM »
Pat, you are storming ahead my friend....

I am thoroughly enjoying this, man! you really know how to build up your audience...

I want Lea to be returned to the good side!!!!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #117 on: May 15, 2011, 10:52:25 AM »
I'm hoping to get more done tonight as well.  I was really pleased with that last chapter, so we'll see what I can get accomplished with the next one!

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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #118 on: May 15, 2011, 06:55:07 PM »
Vader stalked off the hilltop, casting aside all who got in his way, as he made his way to his former Master and Mentor, Obi-Wan Kenobi.  Nineteen years ago, Kenobi betrayed him, humiliated him, dismembered him, and murdered his wife.  He even tried to hide his daughter from him all those years, but that was yet another failure by the elder Jedi.  The tall, black-clad figure marched with passion, cutting down anyone who got close enough to feel the searing burn of his crimson blade.  His shiny onyx dome reflected the horrified visages of the Rebels as they met their deaths, his cape billowed around the echoing screams of pain and misery from the putrid Stormtroopers who failed to move from his path.  As he approached his apprentice on the battlefield, Vader bellowed, "You are to stay your hand, girl.  Kenobi is mine alone."
  
  "This is my battle, Father," retorted Leia, turning her back to him.  "Today, I will end the lives of all before me and prove that I am truly a Sith Lord."
    
 Vader swept his arm in a powerful arc, using the Force to throw Leia off of her feet.  "How dare you turn your back on me?!  You are still now strong enough to face a Jedi Master, regardless of what your ego tells you.  If I have to cut you down myself, I shall," boomed Vader at his daughter.

    Leia easily caught herself and landed on her feet, her lightsaber ignited and at the ready.  Her wicked lips curled into a portrait of hatred at her father's obvious lack of faith.  She watched her father continue his journey to seek our the elder Jedi Master with contempt.  The plum fires that burned inside from the Force began to emanate themselves from her eye sockets, dancing upon the drifts of wind like the fingers of a concert pianist.  She was not going to be left out of this battle with the Jedi.  She promised she would slay all on this battlefield this day: what was one more death to her?

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Obi-Wan began to prepare himself for the coming battle with his former pupil and friend.  He knew he should have ended the boy's life when he had the chance those many years ago on Mustafar.  Had he known his best friend, his brother, would become the walking pillar of evil that stalked the battlefield before him, he would have seen to it that the river of molten lava claimed Anakin that day.  Instead, the boy grew up to become a powerful Sith Lord, Darth Vader.  He stood side by side with the vile Emperor Palpatine, also known as Darth Sidious.  Palpatine had pulled the greatest ruse of any Sith ever throughout the history, and corrupted perhaps the most powerful Jedi ever known in the process.  Vader's viciousness on the battle ground was terrifying to watch, as he used the Force and his lightsaber to cut down and maim any and all before him, ally and foe alike.  His ruby red blade sliced through the air with deadly precision, never missing it's mark.  Vader used Force Push, Force Choke, and other wicked applications of the Force on the dead, dying, and fleeing masses.
     A Stormtrooper stormed at Obi-Wan in an attempt to ovecome the vererable Jedi.  His glistening black armor shone in stark contrast to his vivid purple markings, designating him a part of Darth Leia's 818th Feartroopers.  Known for their high effectiveness, deadly accuracy, and diabolical tactics, these Feartroopers were without souls.  The Feartrooper brought back his arm, fist clenched, and threw it forward at the Master.  Obi-Wan easily sidestepped the focused punch , deflecting the arm away from himself and gripped his wrist into a wrist lock and brought his own elbow into the trooper's throat, incapacitating him.  He then threw the Trooper over his shoulder and to the ground and knocked him unconscious.  As he stood up, another trooper was coming at him hurriedly, so Obi-Wan brought his leg up into a well timed front kick and flung the stunned attacker aside with the Force.  Gathering himself once again, he walked off to meet his former pupil.

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     Mara Jade watched the gap between Vader and Master Obi-Wan narrow, the inevitable battle looming ever closer to its conclusion.  The whispers and murmurs through the Force told her that this day, one of them would not survive.  The air crackled with energy, both sinister and benign.  She felt chills and warmth simultaneously.  Never before had she experienced such conflict in everything all around her.  She knew her duty was to guide Luke should anything happen to Master Obi-Wan.  She was ordered to do so, and she would not disobey Master Kenobi, regardless of how she felt about that.  Luke was incredibly strong in the Force, stronger than she and most likely stronger than Kenobi as well.  His Force potential was off the charts, unparallelled in any of the archives that survived the Jedi Purge.  Even Grand Master Yoda was cautious with Luke, warning Kenobi and herself of the gravity of training him.  But Luke had surpassed such misgivings.  He was a very humble, yet confident young man, neither pompous or arrogant, yet with a steel will and iron resolve.  She glanced in his direction.  There he stood, standing at the rear of the battle, his viridian fire crackling all around him.  His emerald lightsaber shone at his side, at the ready should he need it for any reason.  She marveled as the occasional blaster bolt seared towards him, only to be batted out of thin air by the wave of his hand.  The Jedi Knight didn't even need his lightsaber to deflect such things.  Who would be saving whom, should the situation present itself.  
     No longer content to simply observe the battle all around her, no longer able to watch as her loyal rebel troops fell all around her.  They would lay their lives down for her without a thought, and she felt it only right to do the same for them.  She ignited her lightsaber, the orange blade humming to life, burning bright with the Light Side of the Force.  She leapt into action, shooting Luke a mental message to stay where he was unless she or Obi-Wan called for it.  She felt his displeasure at her order, but he followed it as requested.  She blazed through the ranks of Imperial troopers, clad in both black and white.  Her copper blade sliced and sizzled through their armors, her tangerine cutlass cut down adversary after adversary.  Jedi Master Mara Jade fell into a battle trance, becoming one with the synergy of her body and blade, an artistic rendering of chaos, a symphony of lethality.  She had felled several adversaries when she felt the cold grip of the Dark Side at her limbs.  Stopping herself, she looked up to see Darth Leia staring at her from across the plains.
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Re: In My Father's Footsteps
« Reply #119 on: May 16, 2011, 07:16:21 AM »
Fantastic.

I can't wait to see who survives this. Do you know yet Pat?