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Offline beige-4

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the guardians of the elemental spirit
« on: July 22, 2010, 10:44:41 AM »
the five strolled towards the old jedi master " i pronounce you gaurdians of thy elemental five : fire , water , air , space and last of all earth " boomed the jedi , his voice echoed across the jedi temples holy hall were only certain members of the order were allowed in .
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Re: the guardians of the elemental spirit
« Reply #1 on: July 22, 2010, 05:21:01 PM »
WATTOH I think you need to make this passage longer. This sounds a lot that new movie.
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Re: the guardians of the elemental spirit
« Reply #2 on: July 23, 2010, 05:02:31 AM »
this is a preveiw though
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Re: the guardians of the elemental spirit
« Reply #3 on: July 23, 2010, 01:26:04 PM »
Good start!
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