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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 5 is alive!
« Reply #15 on: May 13, 2010, 12:53:47 AM »
an excellent read
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter six, out now!
« Reply #16 on: May 16, 2010, 11:44:11 AM »
cheers for the comments guys, heres part 6

CHAPTER 6:

'I wouldn't even join your squad if it would save my life'.
'Well that wasn't very nice kid, you really hurt my feelings with that one'.
Denal continued to walk away.
'You know if your looking for clones you won't find any, I destroyed their base completely, no survivours'.
Denal stopped dead in his tracks.
'That trick doesn't work Bane'.
'I said there was no survivors. I captured all the remaining clones after the bomb was dropped to destroy their base, lined them up and shot them dead. One by one.'
'Your lying'.
'Am I ?' 'Trooper's Moe, Jumper and Wookie  of ackley battalion, lieutenant Screamer of ackley battalion, Commander Ganch of-
Denal clenched his fists.
'Should I go on?'
Denal turned and ran towards Bane.
'YOUR LYING!!!!!!'
He threw a puch straight at bane's head, bane deflected it with his shoulder and kneed Denal in the stomach.
Denal fell to the ground, but he rolled over and grabbed Banes leg, twisting it.
'AAAAAAAAAHHHGGH!' Bane shouted. He grabbed Denal's dc snd shot Denal in the chest.
Denal fell to the ground.
'You just don't get the bigger picture , do you kid?'
Bane tuned into his comm on his wrist.
'Helios-3d, get out here and make room on my ship, we've got company.

Denal awoke to find himslef lying on a makeshift bed of ammo crates in Bane's ship.
'What the....'
Rise and shine pretty boy, eat this'.
Bane threw him a food pouch.
'The 'mount of times you tried to kill me today, you need the energy.'
Denal was starving, he started to eat.
'Take me back to courrusant Bane, or else.'
'Or else what? Bespin's our next stop. We got a nice commission while you were having your beauty sleep, and your going to help with the kill.'
'No way'.
'Yes way, or else your dead. that food pouch your enjoying is actually a extremely slow setting posion, just long enough for you to work a session with me, once your done the antidote is yours.'
Denal threw the pouch onto the floor and glared at bane.
'Why?'
'I knew the only way to get your talent abord was to force it abord, and I think poision gives a bit of suspence to a story, don't you?'
Denal fell silent, knowing he was beaten.
'Approching bespin' Helios dronned.
Bane got off of his seat to get ready.
'Look kid, the way I see It Is, If you can't beat bounty hunters, join them. Heck, thats what I did! And who knew blowing up innocent citizens would be so fun?
Banes ship, the sleight of hand flew into Bespin's atmosphere.
'Trust me kid, this is where the fun begins.'

Hope everyone enjoyed part six if anyone's wondering bane shot Denal with the stun setting on the dc, so thats why he's still alive. You will
hear more from ackley battalion after I finsh a idea after this story, Posibbly a spin off to this one or something like that. Whatever happens I have loads of ideas for storys so I hope you guys like my writing style lol.
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 6, out now!
« Reply #17 on: May 16, 2010, 11:58:46 AM »
thanks mate  :)
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 6, out now!
« Reply #18 on: May 16, 2010, 07:23:39 PM »
cool!!!!

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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 6, out now!
« Reply #19 on: May 16, 2010, 08:39:28 PM »
Nice!!!
As do I. It is our lot in life, Master. Shall we find something to kill to cheer us up?
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 7 is up!
« Reply #20 on: May 19, 2010, 02:25:48 PM »
part seven!

CHAPTER SEVEN:

Two cloud cars flew in beside Bane's ship.
'unidentified ship pilot, state your name and your business here or we will be forced to escort you off-plannet.'
Bane patched into the comm channel.
'my name is  feliz mal, I was sent here to fix the proton chargers in cloud city by marzo cuanda. My apprentice is here to help me.'
'Acknowledged sir, proceed to hanger 358  enjoy your work at Cloud city.'
The two cloud cars flew away.
'I didn't know your name is 'feliz', and we're going to fix proton chargers are we? And who's marzo cuanda?'
'Question: unimportant.'
'Shut It clanker, It can be what I want!'
'Your opinion: useless.'
'USELESS!?! I'm gonna-'
'Easy my apprentice, Helios is our ticket out of here If you mess things up. Marzo is an old friend of mine, he'll be watching our back while we do the dirty work.'
Denal slumped back on a crate. 'Whats our target?'
Smuggler, never paid a loan back to Ziro and the hutt wants him dead. No bodyguards on him so this ones going to be like riding a speeder with stabilizers'.
The slight of hand landed gracefully into the hanger.
'Helios, stay in hear, keep the engines running and be ready'.
He threw a pair of workers overalls at Denal.
'Put those on' he said as he jumped into one. 'we need to look natural'.
As Denal and Bane walked  through the rundown alleyways of cloud city, they looked like completely different people.
'What now Bane?'
'You shuting up thats now'.
A cloaked figure came out of a corner and started walking towards them.
Denal clutched his dc hidden inside his overall's pocket.
'Who won last nights bolo-ball match?' Bane questioned to the figure.
'Team coruscant' the figure replied, shrugging off his cloak to reveal he was a Bothan.
'Marz, long time no see.'
'It's been to long Cad, to long.
Marzo stared at Denal.
'Who's the 'apprentice'?'
'It's confidential Marz.'
Marzo laughed.
'Since when have you been confidential?'
'Look Marz, I haven't got all day so have you got the info?'
'(sigh) You never were one for chatting.'
He pulled out a data pad.
'Let's see.....Buring district... fancy hotel....our boy's staying in the 59th room on the 90th floor..... a good sniping spot would be on the top floor of the district plaza, and I'm sure you have all the 'equipment' needed for this job.'
He handed Bane a holoprojector.
'Use this to keep in touch, and if theres trouble I can safe your ass again'.
'That was one time, get over it'.
'Shouldn't you be fixing our chargers by now?'
Bane grinned and started to walk towards Buring district, with a very confused Denal behind him.



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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 7 is up!
« Reply #21 on: May 19, 2010, 03:43:51 PM »
Great!
As do I. It is our lot in life, Master. Shall we find something to kill to cheer us up?
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 7 is up!
« Reply #22 on: May 19, 2010, 03:46:48 PM »
excellent!
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 7 is up!
« Reply #23 on: May 19, 2010, 04:37:55 PM »
nice

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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 7 is up!
« Reply #24 on: June 19, 2010, 05:55:31 AM »
heres chapter 8! sorry I haven't been on for a while  guys I had school exams  :-X  but now I'm on my summer holidays!  :D

CHAPTER 8:

Bane and Denal crouched on top of the district plaza roof.
It was midnight, all the shops in the sector were closed and the streets that had been bustling with creatures and vehicles were now quiet and empty.
It was a perfect time to get a kill.
'I still don't know what  you want me to do Bane'.
'Your the distraction, you make sure he doesn't see me'.
'And how am I going to do that'?
A crimson speeder pulled up beside the plaza.
'You've  got my help'.Marz explained. 'Now lets move before our boy realizes what were doing'.
Denal jumped into the speeder and they headed towards the're prey.

'So I take it your new to this game'? Marz questioned.
'Not my choice to be in 'this game''. Denal muttered.
'If you think that your grand republic Is still out looking for you, your wrong'.
Denal tensed.
'Easy trooper, Im just giving you the facts. Your a clone, Its not like you can't be replaced. I bet they have a new one in your shoes right now'.
Denal threw a punch but Marzo blocked It.
'Quite feisty aren't you'? But I'm on your side mate'. Bounty hunters like us need to stick together, or else were dead. Trust me, your on the good side. We won't leave you to die, know matter what'.
Before Denal could argue they had reached the hotel.
'Come on clonie, It's showtime'.

The two bounty hunters walked along the corridor of the 90th floor.
'Heres the plan, I'm going to get a good shot for Bane and your going to watch my back'.
'What will I do if someone comes'?
'You have a gun, Don't you'?
'But they could be innocent'?
'Everyone has to go sometime, now stop asking questions, just go with the flow'.
Marzo knocked on the smugglers door.
The door opened.
'Look, I  don't want to by a hover- Oh sorry, I thought you were someone else'.
'Mr dulking, I bring a great  message, may I come in'?
'A great message, why certainly! Come In come In'!
Marzo gave Denal a thumbs up as he walked into the room. Denal stood guard in the corridor and wondered how he got here, then a noise echoed from the corridor's corner.

'So whats the message'? Dulking asked anxiously.
'Ziro is pleased with your work, and he wanted me to give you this'.
He pulled out a large package.
'OOOOHH! I do like the look of that!' I'm glad Ziro has appreciated my great smuggling talent, now give me the package'!
'Wait, what's the rush? After all It Is a beautiful night, I wan't to enjoy It'.
Marzo walked  onto the balcony with the package in his grasp.
'It is a beautiful night, but why don't you give me the package now'?
'Ah, breath in that fresh air.'
Below on the plaza roof Bane aimed his rifle for a head shot, a instant kill.
'I want that package meassager'!
'Stop shouting, you'll wake up the whole plannet'.
In the corridor the noise came again.
'Show yourself'! Denal shouted.
'What was that'? Dulking asked.
Look, you're already waking up the neighbors'!
A mouse droid came out of the corner and Denal shot it before he realized what it was.
Dulking jumped, just as Bane fired his rifle, missing the smugglers head by centimeters.
'I'm being attacked'! Dulking cried as he grabbed the package and made a run for the door, but the package ripped open as he ran, with nothing In It.
'What the-'
'I can explain'. Marzo said as he pulled out a blaster.
Before he could fire Dulking pulled out his blaster and blasted Marzo. knocking him off his feet.
'KNOW ONE TRICKS ME!' dulking shouted as he took another shot at marzo, but then then a shot from Bane hit the smuggler right between his eyes.

A alarm went off. Bane grabbed his comm.
'Denal get out of there, We're in trouble'!
'What about Marzo'?
'Forget about him, we have to get out of here'!
Denal made a run for the exit but police droids surrounded him.
'Halt criminal you are under arrest'. One of them stated.
Without thinking Denal blasted a path  through them and made it to a window.
The sleight of hand pulled up next to the window with Bane on board.
He blasted the window's glass.
'Jump kid, It's The only way'!
Denal turned around to see more police droids on his tail. He leaped out of the window and Bane grabbed Denal's hand pulling him into the ship.
'GET US OUT OF HERE HELIOS'!
'Escape guarantied'
The droid accelerated the ship into the sky and they were in lightspeed before the police speeders had even started chase.
Bane, out of breath sat down on his copilot seat, and smiled at Denal.
'Not bad  for a first timer'.

Sorry for such a long chapter but I'm almost done this story probably just 2 chapters left after this one   :)
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 8 is up!
« Reply #25 on: June 19, 2010, 08:09:47 AM »
Nice!
As do I. It is our lot in life, Master. Shall we find something to kill to cheer us up?
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 8 is up!
« Reply #26 on: June 19, 2010, 10:30:36 AM »
Thanks IN97!
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Re: Fighting for survival update: chapter 8 is up!
« Reply #27 on: June 19, 2010, 11:10:59 AM »
this is great