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Star Wars Writings / Oasis Calm --- 9/25/15
« on: May 14, 2013, 11:00:00 PM »
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Order 66: 21st Nova Corp. --- Mygeeto ---


Snow flutters through the smoky gray haze,

Rising to my feet, ice crunches beneath my gear.

The enemy clanking, far across the bridge, eludes my gaze,

The tall Jedi approaches as does the commander; dissolving our fear.

Igniting his blue saber, Mundi stands upon the barricade,

“Forward!” he orders…as many have done before..

Shouldering our rifles we press on to follow the glowing blade,

Fires flair, lasers glaze, missiles burst; battle after battle we’ve endured.

My brothers fall...the payment of an ungrateful republic,

You’ve ordered us again to follow you to hell.

We’ve been told our sacrifice is symbolic,

I’m not afraid to die, but after this…it’ll be you who is the shell.

New incoming order! Our lives are no longer yours to sell!
« Last Edit: September 25, 2015, 11:58:31 AM by TheIRISH Rogue »
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #1 on: May 14, 2013, 11:01:11 PM »
Order 66: Master Yoda


Fallen, the shroud of the Clone Wars had.

Void, the essence of the Force became.

Within a moment, an empty swath cut through the galaxy.

Stretched thin through the galaxy we had been,

warn tired, our code challenged, perceptions: tattered and torn.

Vulnerable we were from every direction..most severely from within.

Diverse, vibrant, full of hope was the galaxy..

Now, created chaos and strife the Empire has..

Tightly clenched, order is, by this Sith Emperor,

instability he has brewed.

Rebellion, like a phoenix, will rise from the ash of the republic.

Retreat, bide our time we must..

Squander our hope now if we fight…into exile I go.

Watch over the boy you will..
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #2 on: May 14, 2013, 11:01:57 PM »
Order 66: 327th Star Corp: Commander Bly


We are soldiers and we have orders.


General Secura has led us valiantly from the start of this conflict.
Through dark mountains to fluorescent marshes, from Acklay to battle droids;
She has saved my life countless times and I hers.
Pacification is our mission and our mission is on Felucia.


My hologram projector pinged --
“Execute order 66” it said.
My training is clear,
I am a soldier and I have my orders.

On patrol we scouted ahead of the column.
She approached the crest of the hill,
the planet seemed to go silent..
No ambient plants, no animals, no droids.

Thankfully we had on our helmets that day.
None of us could stand to look her in the eye; until she began to turn.
My rifle already fixed upon her back; my eyes met her glance,
Before her instinct could react we pulled our triggers.
We kept firing..
we kept firing hoping to quicken her end.
It was quicker than the inquisition that would soon come;
quicker than a life lived in a corner, always staring at the door..always with one eye open.

Secura's glance pierced me in a way I will not soon forget.
Always having longed to see her eyes again, to be near her at the close of a battle;
Thoughts I will now bury with her.

I was born a soldier...and we follow orders.
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #3 on: May 15, 2013, 03:33:11 AM »
reminds me of Dulce Et Decorum Est by Wilfred Owen a British First World War poet who served in the trench at the Somme.

Great work Blake  ,youv'e now taken the Clone Wars into a different medium mate  10/10
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #4 on: May 15, 2013, 10:45:15 AM »
reminds me of Dulce Et Decorum Est by Wilfred Owen a British First World War poet who served in the trench at the Somme.

Great work Blake  ,youv'e now taken the Clone Wars into a different medium mate  10/10
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Awe thanks Jay! That is a killer comment. I just went a read the poem you left..wow was that potent. I studied History in university..probably why I write about the war aspect of the Clone Conflict. ha ha

Thanks again! I've got a string of them I'm working on. Any suggestions for characters, just shout! :)  ()rr
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #5 on: May 15, 2013, 12:36:42 PM »
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/15/13
« Reply #6 on: May 15, 2013, 09:53:12 PM »
Tamer,

Thanks for the fp shout-out! ha ha, its much appreciated.
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/16/13
« Reply #7 on: May 15, 2013, 09:53:57 PM »
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Order 66: Shock Troops of the Coruscant Guard -- Commander Thire


Fatigued and weary the troopers of Coruscant are,
An attack on the capital was nothing but imminent,
We held the senate district by the tip of our nails,
Our casualties but a shallow scar.

Mischievous were the intentions of the Jedi as of late,
Made all too clear as their influence and position spread,
They plotted and tumbled from their moral high ground,
Filling the public and their troopers with animosity and hate.

An alarm has sounded in the chambers of the senate,
A holo projection of our leader fighting off the nimble High Jedi Master,
Their last ditch effort..a final coup de grace..a second attempt to assassinate,
Your temple is in ruin..our success met with the sound of victorious sennet.

I will hunt until you are caught or lie wasted in the gutter,
The great masters, the pacifist protectors, falling grey into memory,
We'll hold your temple as a reminder to those who do not acclimate to strife,
The sight of our ruby Imperium won't leave you without a shudder.
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/16/13
« Reply #8 on: May 16, 2013, 01:32:48 AM »
another excellent poem mate
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/16/13
« Reply #9 on: May 17, 2013, 09:36:28 AM »
This is a sample preview I wrote in conjunction with a piece currently in progress for a competition on deviatart. I'll be going up against pretty pictures with words...it'll be interesting!! The contest is supposed to incorporate Rayn44's OC Aira-ty Nokta. It will be similar to changing tides in format....but 1 volume :p

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Her's/ focus of the contest: http://rayn44.deviantart.com/art/Aira-ty-age-meme-273436940?q=gallery%3Arayn44%2F31146607&qo=168

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Jedi Order  – Padawan Closed Records --                                                                                         Status: Sealed
Name: Aira-ty Nokta                 Age during incident: 16                                                            Training Status: N/A
Case No.  412248. 0011. 11383XT                            Master/Trainer: Nada Athura (Killed during planetary negotiation)

       Padawan trainee Aira-ty Nokta has selected to leave the Jedi Order on her own accord. Upon the death of her master, Nada Athura, the pupil was unable to cope with the grievous loss. Exhibiting signs of rash behavior, unorthodox practices, and continuous questioning of Jedi tradition, it has been heavily debated whether or not the Temple should send a retrieval team. Master Athura has always been her biggest support; now that he has become one with the force, she feels more alone than ever and will not accept his passing. Guardian Kien has volunteered to seek her out in order to settle her mind.

       The future of a padawan is not noteworthy enough to appeal to the higher councils. With the signs exhibited by this particular student, I believe we will be opening ourselves up dangerously by allowing such a rash individual to remain. She may become of note in the future as some have seen during their meditations, but it will not be as a Jedi. I am declining Guardian Kien’s request and sealing her record. Reports suggest she’s began to link with several different mercenary crews.

       Aira-ty Nokta has chosen self banishment from the order; hence fourth from this point on, she will be prohibited from entering the temples inner most sanctums – So ordered.   -- May the force be with her.
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/16/13
« Reply #10 on: May 17, 2013, 10:05:04 AM »
very very clever you give this an air of authenticity  love it!
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/20/13
« Reply #11 on: May 19, 2013, 09:56:08 PM »
Here is a request I had on deviant art--- They requested a piece on Commander Neyo

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If you want to see anyone, feel free to leave a comment. My next one is going to be another request:   Ion Team -- Apparently a Commando squad who didn't follow the order. That will make for an interesting piece.


91st Reconnaissance Corp:  CC-8826 -- Commander Neyo


Cold, Calculated, Code, Commanding, and Calm:

Words that describe a successful general.
Words that show there is no equal to me.
Words that prove I am a Clone Commander.


Tenacious, Tactful, Thunderous, Tireless, and Tough:

A list describing the 91st Recon Corp.
A list showing how we operate..that our enemy will have cause to fear us.
A list that proves this corp has patrolled system after system, overcoming any threat with diligence.


Caring, Trusting, Idealistic, Thoughtful, Proud, and Invulnerable:

Diverse strengths of the Jedi,
Diverse weaknesses of the Jedi,
Diverse ways to bring them to their knees.


Explosive, Fast, Effortless , Fiery, and Easy

This is how we fight,
This is how it happened,
This is how she, Stass Allie, died.

All too easy…
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/20/13
« Reply #12 on: May 19, 2013, 11:14:44 PM »
Ooooh very very good!
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/20/13
« Reply #13 on: May 21, 2013, 10:26:51 AM »
Here's another request off of DA that I did. I was asked to write about Ion Squad...a squad of Republic Commandos who did NOT obey Order 66. :)

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Clone Commandos -- Ion Team -- Captain Climber

Trained to be the best of the best,
We all stand tall.
Alone we are nothing,
Like fingers of a hand we clench the enemy by the throat,
extinguishing their plot with a well placed explosive or perfectly aimed shot.

From the rain covered platforms of Kamino,
Through catacombs of Geonosis,
Trekking deeper into the forests of Kashyyk,
Our missions take us far and wide, but no element is too tough.

The Republic has come to love us,
The Confederation has come to fear us,
our front line brothers nearly resent us,
but all have heard of our legendary efforts.

My brothers, we were Ion Team,
A critical element of the 22nd Air Combat Wing.
To the Corporate Alliance headquarters on Murkhana we were sent,
with Master Jedi Roan Shryne.

Together we flew, landed, and fought.
Forward to the shield generator and on we went!
In came a message: Execute Order 66;
To us this was an invalid command.

None of it made sense:
The droids shutting down,
The quick surrender,
The execution orders.

No..we wont follow the order.
We fought our brothers with non-lethal traps.
Its only right for those poor puppets who have been mislead to their fates.
The Jedi have not become the enemy...instead we have.

The Jedi escaped with the help of our preciously spent time.
Now two brethren of Ion lie dead on the floor,
Not by the work of Commander Salvo,
Rather they were cleaved by the red blade of our new master.

We've fled into the forest,but to what end?
We swore to die another day..and now we will,
Not as heroes, but as fugitives.
Though the hand is broken, Trace and I will push on.

Goodbye my brothers.
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Re: ORDER 66 Poems/ Writings/ Randoms --- 5/20/13
« Reply #14 on: May 21, 2013, 10:48:07 PM »
If you follow the letter's down the side...you'll see whose poem this is.


7th Sky Corp. – The 212th Attack Battalion –


Called across the galaxy; following the wake of the Jedi.
Ordered to Teth, Christophsis, Ryloth, Umbara, even back to Geonosis.
Missions have been completed with valorous success.
Missions have also gone awry with tragic costs.
Attacking Coruscant was a desperate measure for the CIS.
Not one planet allied to their cause will elude the souls of our boots.
Down and down their capitals will crumble.
Enigmatic our missions have become.
Rifts are forming in the sand of Utapau as my troops tight-rope down.

Called by the Supreme Chancellor’s Office on my comlink.
Order 66
Destroy the Jedi at all cost with extreme prejudice.
You should have died in that fall… If only that order came in before I handed you that   
                                                bloody saber…
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